Assignment

The directions are: __ Limit sentence length, limit word length. Find shorter words to replace the following words. __ #1: The word given is "Advise", I would replace it with "Teach". #5: The word given is "Determine", I would replace it with "Find". -   The directions are: __ Revise the following sentences to avoid sexist language. __ #4: "The president of the corporation, a women, met with her sales staff." I would revise that sentence to say the following: "The president of the corporation, met with the sales staff." #10: "The policemen and firemen rushed to the scene of the accident." I would revise that sentence to say the following: "The police and firefighters rushed to the scene of the accident." -   The directions are: __ Revise these sentences-replace the vague, impressionistic words with more specific information. __ #1: "We need this information as soon as possible." I would revise that sentence to say the following: "We need the sales results for the last physical month, turned in this Monday by 2pm." #2: "The machinery will replace the flawed piece of equipment in our department." I would revise that sentence to say the following:  "The new printer will replace the broken one in the sales department."
 * "Reducing Word Length to Achieve Conciseness," page 79 **
 * "Avoiding Sexist Language," (page 120) #4, #10 **
 * "Achieving Clarity," (page 78) #1, #2 **

- Completed by Nathan Mellendorf